<p style="text-align: justify;"><img style="width: 808px; height: 61px; margin-left: auto; margin-right: auto; float: none;" src="https://info.compassedu.hk/sucai/content/1682683030812/1682683030812.png" width="808" height="61" /></p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><a href="http://www.jorgecolomardetectives.com/adviser_16451_1" target="_blank" rel="noopener"><span style="text-decoration: underline; color: #1890ff;">劉澤安</span></a></p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h6">簡介：2022年度&ldquo;創意先鋒獎&rdquo;，專注CS、EE等工科文書寫作，致力于提供學員需求導向的個性化文書服務，希望用認真負責的態度助力實現每一個留學夢想，已幫助多名學員斬獲上百枚世界頂尖名校offer</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">科研經歷是個人陳述的一大重點，許多同學都會有類似的困擾：同樣是描述自己做過的項目，如何讓我的經歷寫得與眾不同、獨具特色，從而一下子吸引讀者的眼球，為自己的留學申請加分呢？</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><br />大部分科研經歷的寫作都存在著一個誤區：認為只是一板一眼地把整段經歷陳述完整即可；其實，這種&ldquo;流水賬&rdquo;式寫作方式會不可避免地導致個人陳述千篇一律、失去高光點。相反，成功的科研經歷不僅能夠凸顯申請項目要求的個人能力和技能，還能體現個人獨特的思考和對相關學科、行業的認識，甚至能夠通過清晰的寫作思路側面體現申請者的邏輯思維能力。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><br />今天<strong>#心動的文書#</strong>欄目，將與大家探尋如何將科研經歷寫得與眾不同，從而使personal statement脫穎而出。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">方法一：從&ldquo;項目動機&rdquo;入手，展現一個獨特的&ldquo;我&rdquo;</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">許多科研經歷的寫作急于向讀者展開大量細節，但卻缺乏一個優秀的項目動機作為敘述的鋪墊。事實上，<strong>它不僅起著引入的作用，還能夠顯示申請者學習該專業的決心、對項目開展背景的深入理解、或者對某項技術相關應用的個人探究。</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">Before</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">During my undergraduate period, I was involved in a series of research projects. Among them, the project named Network Public Opinion Analysis System Based on Big Data Technologies impressed me deeply. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【點出項目標題】</span>It was designed to tell actual users from online water armies based on user comments and data of user characteristics on the popular Chinese social media platform.<span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【闡述項目旨在】</span> Throughout this project, I gained proficiency in semi-supervised cooperative training algorithms and harvested precious insights into data collection, analytics, and forecasting.<span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【技能、能力方面的收獲】</span>...</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #1890ff;"><strong>After</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">In the relentless pursuit of academic excellence and progress, I eagerly attempted to involve myself in a wealth of research projects. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【增加段首句的鋪墊】</span>One of them worth noting, Network Public Opinion Analysis System Based on Big Data Technologies, aimed to differentiate actual users from online water armies (user groups paid to post comments online) based on user comments and data of user characteristics on the popular Chinese social media platforms. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【為&ldquo;網絡水軍&rdquo;的翻譯增加解釋，便于理解】</span>As an ordinary netizen, I found the pervasive online We-media comments for mischievous ends haunted me so much, that I felt obliged to unmask them using modern big data techniques, weakening the influence of such malicious gossips. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【加入對項目動機的描述：由于自身作為一名網民觀察到一些心懷鬼胎的自媒體言論對網絡使用者的巨大影響，因此希望利用先進的大數據技術去辨別網絡水軍和普通用戶的發言，弱化這種負面影響】</span>Throughout this project, I gained proficiency in...</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #1890ff;"><strong>Analysis</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">原文僅是對科研項目做了平鋪直敘，從項目名字、旨在、到收獲、步驟，<strong>顯得呆板無趣，缺乏重點，也沒有體現申請者個人的主觀看法和申請意愿。</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">而修改后的版本則通過<strong>加入了對項目動機的闡述</strong>，向讀者展示申請者是如何不斷嘗試著將大數據科技融入生活中的真實場景中的。這不僅體現了申請者平時點滴的思索和積累，也側面<strong>反映出其在選擇參加科研項目時明確的目標性</strong>（想要學習大數據科學），勾勒出一個真實而活躍的&ldquo;我&rdquo;，給讀者留下深刻印象。其實同一科研主題的項目內容往往相近，但最吸引人的總是一些獨特的personal opinions。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">方法二：拋棄無腦列舉，采取問題導向型敘述模式</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">許多同學想要盡可能地窮舉科研經歷完成的過程，卻導致整段經歷顯得冗余無序，失去邏輯。<strong>事實上，一段成功的科研經歷應當有一個明確的框架作為骨干，而問題導向型框架就是一個不錯的選擇。</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #1890ff;"><strong>Before</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Based on the fact that infants are active and cannot be forced to intervene, I designed a set of non-contact infant vision screening devices, and came up with a diopter measurement algorithm based on medical image processing. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【闡述項目主旨：設計出一套無接觸式嬰幼兒視力篩查裝置，并在此基礎上提出一種基于醫學圖像處理的屈光度測量算法】</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">I first carried out image cutting, preprocessing, noise removal, lens distortion correction, spot positioning and other steps. Then I implemented image fitting and data training based on machine learning, and finally got the diopter detection results. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【列舉項目的每個步驟，以及涉及的相關工具和技術】</span>...</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #1890ff;"><strong>After</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">On account of the characteristics of infants, I designed a set of non-contact infant vision screening devices, and proposed a diopter measurement algorithm based on medical image processing. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【闡述項目主旨】</span>Throughout the whole period, what challenged me most was the image pre-processing and fitting process I went through.<span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【揭示整段經歷中碰到的最大的兩個困難：預處理和圖像擬合】</span> Confronted with the problems like lens distortion and ambient noises, I perused large volumes of related literature to get acquainted with noise-eliminating algorithms like binarization, gray processing, and filtering, along with lens-distortion-correction algorithms like image dilation. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【針對第一個問題圖像預處理（鏡頭畸變和環境噪點等），閱讀文獻學習圖像處理技術來解決】</span> Thanks to the in-depth literature studying, I gained a down-to-earth perception of principles and rectification of environmental interference. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【闡述閱讀文獻階段獲得的感悟和提升】</span>As for the bottlenecks I experienced during image fitness, I followed the supervisor&rsquo;s advice to adopt machine learning algorithms for model construction and training.<span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【針對第二個問題圖像擬合，使用ML算法來構建和訓練模型】</span>Upon completing this project, my problem-shooting skills, autonomic learning abilities, and quantitative abilities were significantly improved from the process ranging from discovering health problems, designing reasonable schemes, establishing hardware devices, and developing software.<span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【闡述第二階段獲得的提升和感悟】</span>...</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #1890ff;"><strong>Analysis</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">原文只是平淡地將整段經歷從頭到尾地按步驟呈現了出來，完整地羅列了每個步驟，卻<strong>沒有指明項目最具挑戰性的部分，也沒有強調克服困難的過程</strong>，導致整段經歷顯得平平無奇。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">修改后的版本則將整段經歷的結構按所遇到的兩大困難分為兩個部分，分別闡述是如何解決這兩個問題的，以及這一過程給自己帶來的感悟和提升。<strong>這種敘述結構使得科研經歷顯得主次分明、邏輯清晰，將更多的筆墨聚焦在申請者的解決問題能力上。</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">方法三：展望項目相關的實際應用場景，畫上點睛之筆</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">比起直接在陳述完項目成果和感悟后就草草收尾，<strong>適當展望一下這項研究未來的進步空間，以及其潛在的應用價值</strong>，能夠幫助申請者體現自身的學術素養，為科研經歷的撰寫增色不少。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #1890ff;"><strong>Before</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">...After the hardware device and algorithm platform were built, I collected visual information of nearly 100 people for testing, which showed high diopter accuracy. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【闡述最終項目成果】</span>This project gave me rich inspiration concerning health data science.<span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【引發我想去學習健康數據科學】</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #1890ff;"><strong>After</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">After the hardware device and algorithm platform were completed, I collected visual information from nearly 100 people for testing and attained a high diopter accuracy, winning the third prize for the College Students&rsquo; Innovative Entrepreneurial Training Plan Program. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【強調項目獲得的獎項】</span>This project endowed me with insightful opinions concerning health data science. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【引出對健康數據科學新的認識】</span>On one hand, I firmly believe that the combination of medical image processing technology and data science will benefit minority groups by helping solve intractable traditional medical problems via information technology, especially disease prevention and treatment. <span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【一方面，展望圖像處理技術和健康數據科學對于少數群體醫療問題的強大作用，尤其是疾病的預防和治療】</span>On the other hand, I will attach more importance to healthcare issues with keen observations and constantly seek solutions from data analytic perspectives.<span style="background-color: #f9f09f;">【另一方面，表示自己未來會繼續關注健康數據科學在醫療問題方面的應用，強調未來學習這個專業的決心】</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #1890ff;"><strong>Analysis</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">原文只是簡單描述了最終取得的成果作為結尾，讀起來略微顯得些許潦草。而修改后的版本則適當擴充了一些自己對于健康數據科學在醫療領域實用性的見解，側面體現自身對該行業的興趣和認識，并<strong>再次強調了自己想要學習申請專業的motivation，緊扣個人陳述的主題。</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><img style="width: 808px; height: 188px; margin-left: auto; margin-right: auto; float: none;" src="https://info.compassedu.hk/sucai/content/1682683039035/1682683039035.png" width="808" height="188" /></p>